Talk:Suicide

A lot of text has been added to this article that doesn't make much sense in English. There are numerous disjointed sentences that don't seem to have any connection to the rest of the paragraph they are in. Any help to make the article more readable would be appreciated.

The problem seems to be the writer's unfamilarity with dependent clauses and compound sentences. For example, some sentences i've tried to correct begin with "Although" and "Rather" even though there is no counterpoint that the text is presented to be 'rather than' or 'although to'. This is probably stemming from an incomplete education of English composition on the part of the editor(s) responsible. As I said, it would be helpful if other editors could try to correct these shortcomings when people try to add such substandard writing, or if the editors involved could seek out some editing help. -- Captain MKB 12:40, June 19, 2010 (UTC)